Fix typos and rephrase some details slightly.

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 On wednesday 7. of November I gave talk at EPFSUG in Brussels about
 FreedomBox.
 
-EPFSUG is an interest group Free Software users working inside the
+EPFSUG is an interest group of Free Software users working inside the
 European Parliament.
 
-The FreedomBox is a project to that helps non-geeks care about their
+The FreedomBox is a project to help non-geeks care about their
 personal privacy when online, same ways as geeks have practiced for a
 decade or more.
 
-The goal is a small, cheap hardware box looking like and operating like
+The goal is a small, cheap physical box looking like and operating like
 an internet gateway or wifi router many are accustomed to nowadays - but
-with two additions:
+with three additions:
 
  * Easy and intuitive to setup and personalize for non-geeks
  * Offers routines to help you protect your privacy
@@ -25,10 +25,12 @@ with two additions:
 control of your information - you can then use that control to keep
 secrets from others or to share with others as you like.
 
-Talking about personal privacy at the European Parliament was a bit of a
-twist, because that place is not a home but a (huge) office space, where
-it is arguably less obvious that you should treat information as
-personal, or that you are even allowed to do so.
+Talking about personal privacy in the European Parliament
+can seem a bit of a stretch.
+It is not a home but a (huge) office space,
+where it is perhaps less obvious
+that you should treat some information as personal,
+or that you are even allowed to do so.
 
 Try watch the [videos][], and if you have questions then please don't
 hesitate to get in touch with me about them.